A Dream - Draft One
A dream I had was very strange. The unusual dream made me rouse suddenly from sleep at midnight. In the dreamland, I saw myself lie in the bathroom and was covered with fresh blood. Full of scare, I rushed out of the house to find my family and friends. When I found my mom and dad, they ignore me and act like I didn’t stand in front of them. I was confused so that I called their name loudly. The same reaction happened, they turned their backs on me. Walking on the street alone, no one could hear me or even see me. At this moment, I burst out crying and fell down on the street. Suddenly, dizziness surrounded me, I was taken to a completely different world that I have never been. Finally, I realized that I were a ghost. At this time, I woke up with my clothes damp with sweat. This is the most terrible dream that I will never forget!

5 Comments:
full of 是adj喔
mom dad在寫作最好不要用
用mother father
ha ha!It is funny
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Sally Sun, at 2:54 AM
I saw myself lie in the bathroom and was covered with fresh blood.
上面可以寫詳細一點
血流成河阿 什麼之類的
躺在浴室的地上吧 可以寫清楚一點
順便充字數= =+
Full of scare
*being full of scare
they ignored me and acted like
過去式!
I was confused so that I called their name loudly.
I was "so" confused "that" I....
可以再寫多一點!
and... 快去罰站 !!!
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Estella, at 8:08 AM
What a terrible dream!
""should be "Being full of..."
"they ignore me and act like I didn’t stand in front of them. " should be"...ignored me and acted..."
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Debie, at 8:11 AM
I woke up with my clothes damp with sweat.
damp是不是要改用為damped
By
Unknown, at 6:43 PM
Your dream was very terrible and also very unforgettable...
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Vivian, at 5:22 AM
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